Thursday, March 20, 2025

Et tu, Editor?

 “The world is a hellish place, and bad writing is destroying the quality of our suffering.” ― Tom Waits

Contemporary editing doesn’t kick any ass, either.

I have long said the Internet needs editors. Without the space restrictions imposed by newsprint or magazine pages, even professional journalists tend to yammer on well past the point where anyone cares what they’re saying. This is why I make every effort to keep these posts to between 600 – 800 words, the standard length of a traditional newspaper column. (Interviews tend to run longer depending on the subject’s responses.)

As for the quality of what editing takes place, even venues with professional editors are guilty. To use a trivial example that most clearly shows the point, ledes are routinely buried these days. I first noticed this when reading the sports pages, where one can sometimes go several paragraphs before learning the score of the game, which is the first thing people look for when they read a recap.

It's in novels where this really irritates me. The last several books I’ve read are rife with the kinds of errors writers may make through having too tight a deadline, or simple copy and paste errors that, frankly, are the sole reasons copy editors exist. While I do not excuse the writer altogether – after all, it’s our name on the cover – editors might want to do a better job, considering how much we hear about their importance.

A few examples from my recent reading:

·       “Anything under .50 is small caliber.” Really? A .50 caliber machine gun is what they used in World War II to shoot down fighter planes. Currently, the Desert Eagle, often considered the most powerful handgun in the world (Dirty Harry notwithstanding) is a .50 cal. Correct me if I’m wrong, but “small” caliber handguns are .22s and .25s; maybe a .32. A .38 or a 9 mm is not a small caliber weapon.

·       Speaking of 9 mm, it’s ‘nine,’ not ‘point nine,’ which is how one has to read the ever popular ‘.9 mm.’ A .9 mm bullet would have a diameter of 0.035 inches, which is about 3/64 of an inch, or about the size of the tip of a dart. It had better hit you someplace critical if it’s going to do much damage.

·       Using the same word or phrase too close together and/or too often. I confess to being prone to this one myself and spend much of my editing and rewriting time seeking them out for correction. They happen most often during revisions when the author cuts, copies, or rewrites a sentence or paragraph and loses track of what exactly is where. Again, the author should catch that, but authors are focused on creating; the editor’s sole purpose is to catch these things.

·       Scenes or conversations that cover the same information multiple times. Again, I often do this in first drafts, as I’m not sure which I like better and know I’ll be by here again. Once again, this is the author’s responsibility, but pointing out such things is what the editor is paid to do.

·       Last, and maybe most egregious, I recently read a book where the tenses changed erratically throughout. I understand this in dialog; some people talk that way. The narrative tense needs to be consistent, certainly within a paragraph.

I was lucky when working with a publisher. Most of my books were edited by Chris Rhatigan and are better because of his efforts. Over time he came to recognize my stylistic choices and either stopped ‘correcting’ them or made suggestions as to the passage could be improved.

Publishers do less for authors all the time. The least we should be able to expect is a professional editing job. I could guess why it’s not that way, but I would be guessing, and my guesses would not be flattering.

Oh, yeah. This one came in at 663 words, including this sentence. Down from 798, thanks to judicious editing.

Thursday, March 13, 2025

A Case for the Legitimate Uses of AI

It’s safe to say I’ve been harsh in my denunciations of writers who use artificial intelligence in their work. Nothing I’ll say here contradicts that. Artificial intelligence (AI) is, and will continue to be, useful in too many aspects of life to mention; I welcome many of them. It’s in the creative arena where I have my primary issues with its use.

Let’s get the vitriol out of the way: I have no time for ‘writers’ who use AI to ‘create’ anything, or even to generate ideas. If you feel the need for AI to write ad copy or marketing materials or a news or journal article, you be you. Just don’t call yourself a writer, as you’re a notch below plagiarist on the food chain. At least the copycat looked up what to steal.

That said, AI can be of legitimate value to writers. I’ll use myself as an example.

I used to print my final drafts a chapter at a time and read them aloud, marking the printed page as I found things that needed improvement. This became a difficult process when I developed macular degeneration, as I had to devote too much concentration to reading accurately to have any left over for listening to how it fell on the ear.

Enter Microsoft Word’s Read Aloud feature, which allows me to listen to a disembodied voice read what I see on the screen, which I magnify and reverse the image to accommodate my eyesight. I then go back and make the necessary changes right there on the screen.

How do I remember what needs to be changed? I never do more than a chapter at a time, and I always have Word display the document’s line numbers. I then make note of which lines need an adjustment and go directly there to make them.

A piece of advice: When making corrections in this manner, work backward. That way the line numbers you’re looking for won’t have changed as you make edits to the document.

When that draft is complete, I use the Check Document tool to look for spelling, grammar, and a few other potential errors. Many – maybe even most – of the suggestions will be ignored in a work of fiction. Names, places, and bits of dialog may not be in Word’s dictionary until I add them. (‘Jagov’ comes to mind in the Penns River stories, as well as names such as Napierkowski, Neuschwander, and Wierzbicki.) I may want some grammar to remain incorrect, especially in dialog. (As Chandler once famously wrote, “When I split an infinitive, God damn it, I split it so it will remain split.”) The clarity check typically calls out passive voice, which my years of writing documents for the government make me particularly prone to.

That’s what I use AI for: proofreading. It makes up for my deficiencies in vision and lack of training in proper grammar. Creating and driving the story forward are my job and always will be. AI’s only function is to clean up the horse shit after my parade has passed. 

Thursday, March 6, 2025

An Interview With Eric Beetner, Author of Real Bad, Real Soon

 Among the joys of being a writer is getting to know people like Eric Beetner. As nice a person as I know, Eric is, in addition to being a gifted author, a musician, an artist, and a telented video editor with seven Emmy nominations to his credit.

It’s been way too long since he’s been here, so the occasion of hois newest book, Real Bad, Real Soon, the sequel to last year’s outstanding The Last Few Miles of Road.

One Bite at a Time: Your books read as though theyre passing directly into the readersmind with little or no authorial intrusion. As a writer myself, I know thats a lot harder todo than it might sound. How do you manage it?

Eric Beetner: As much as I love a well-crafted sentence that makes you pause and marvel over the word choice, the simile, the metaphor I’d have never thought of – they also risk taking a reader out of the story. The scenario I just described means I’ve stopped reading and am now thinking of the author. I don’t want people to think about me at all when they read my books. I should be invisible.

In a way, I think my day job as a TV/Film editor may influence that. My craft, when done right, is invisible to the viewer. You should never come out of a movie and think, “Man, that was so well cut.” If you notice it, then it’s not really well cut except in instances of music montage or specifically designed editorial moments, but even those are there as showpieces and outliers when it comes to telling the story. You have your moment (think of the many music montages in Goodfella, let’s say) then the song fades, and you go back to being invisible.

 approach writing the same way. My favorite books to read are ones where the story moves along as if by an unseen hand. There is craft in that. It’s not dumbing down language so the reader doesn’t have to “think” about it. Rather, it’s being aware that language is there to be understood easily and in most cases, simplicity is best to communicate your story.

 

OBAAT: You always have a unique take on hit men. First there were Lars and Shaine inthe Devil books. Now its Carter McCoy, Breanna, and a third person I wont namebecause it will spoil the ending of The Last Few Miles Of Road. Im not asking youwhere you get your ideas – well, sort of, maybe – but what inspired these twists on agenre that has been done to death?

EB: If I’m starting to write a crime novel I assume going in there will be death, so I think how can I make it something you might not have seen before? I like exploring the consequences of violence. I don’t ever want to take it lightly. I want there to be a cost to any death on the page. If I’m thinking in those terms, then the characters have to adjust and they sort of automatically get this extra layer on top you don’t get if someone is just a cold-blooded killer.

If you look at the best books and films where there is a cypher of a person whose only job is to be the best killer out there with zero emotion, then the true center of the story is usually someone else who the audience can connect with because there’s no empathizing with an emotionless killing machine.

OBAAT: This is mostly for the fledgling writers out there, but how has your experienceas an author differed from what you expected?

EB: You are catching me on a day where my only answer is that is has been SO MUCH HARDER than I wanted it to be. I’ve been kicked in the crotch by this business more times than I can count and I often wonder why I persist. I could run down the list of all the indignities and bad breaks I’ve gotten, but we don’t have the space and nobody wants to hear me complain.

When I started publishing in 2009, I had a Freshman class of other writers who I knew and was close with and others who I was aware of and have followed their careers. I’d say easily 75% of them have fallen away. Cancelled contracts, dropped by agents, lost the fire – whatever the cause, I’m still hanging around where so many have quit. Others of the peer group are still going because they’ve achieved a measure of success which is great to see.

I’m sure I’ve made some poor choices, trusted some wrong people, which has contributed to my frustration and my lack of sales. But every time I think of writing my big send-off letter on my way out the door and detailing the crushing lows of what I’ve endured, I’m reminded of how many kind people I’ve met, how many hands up, favors, kindnesses small and large I’ve been on the receiving end of over my time and I realize it’s not at all bad. Not in the least.

So yeah, I’ve never been a best seller. Can’t seem to make a foreign sales deal, never had a movie made. I’ve had MULTIPLE publishers go out of business while publishing my stuff. Had books I delivered in full end up never coming out. Had to pivot and adjust and re-think everything at every turn. But what makes it worth it are the friends I’ve made. Many are the same names on my shelf who I love to read year after year. And the experiences I’ve had, even in the relatively small-time world of my publishing career.

It is NOT for the weak or the thin skinned. It’s a brutal, heartbreaking, commerce-driven business that will chew you up and spit you out. But if you need to tell stories, if you love other book people, if you want to meet your heroes up close and see how down-to-earth they really are, then come on in. Even if you only last a short time, once you write and publish a book, it’s something nobody can take away from you and something relatively few people actually do (though on most days it feels like everyone and their mother has written a book)

OBAAT: When we chatted in 2017, you said, I’m always fighting my instinct to write acharacter who is fifty as the olderguy.” Carter McCoy is well past fifty, so you clearlygot over it. What changed in your outlook, and not just that you got older. A lot of writersget older and never get past that hurdle.

EB: I like writing characters with a history and some life experience. For Carter, I needed someone with nothing to lose. Literally. You can’t take his life from him because he’s only got weeks, maybe months to live. I could have given a young guy his disease, but I also liked the idea of a man who has reached his 70s and lived a good life and now has to struggle with himself to see if he can become someone else, and if killing someone who he thinks deserves it will fundamentally change who he is. These were all interesting ideas to me that carried more weight when he had a few more years in him. Everyone changes in their 20s in a thousand different ways. Far fewer people reinvent themselves in their 70s.

But hey, I’m smart enough to give him a younger person to interact with and readers to react to. The Carter McCoy books aren’t written for a geriatric crowd, even as I quickly approach that stage myself.

OBAAT: When you were here in 2015 I asked, If you could have written any book of thepast hundred years, what would it be, and what is it about that book you admire most?”Your reply: Ill say Wild at Heart. Im a huge Barry Gifford fan and this is ground zero formost people on his work and the start of his most famous creation, the Sailor and Lulabooks.”

Its been ten years. Would your answer be the same?

EB: I’m not sure. Maybe the cynical answer would be to pick something that has sold much better. I honestly think that the satisfaction for me lies in the fact that I have written books and created now a body of work of which I am enormously proud. I’d hate to think of writing someone else’s book. That’s their story to tell just as I think my books could only have been written by me. When I think about quitting or the inevitable day when I’ll be done by choice or by circumstance, I know that I did what I set out to do creatively. Commercially, there are many goals still left to attain. I have ambitions and goals both big and small. But I can rest easy knowing I have created more in the fiction world than I ever thought possible. I’ve told stories that are different and while I know I’ve recycled themes that are interesting to me, I’ve written mostly vastly different books. I’ve taken chances, experimented, stretched beyond my comfort zone. I have books I’d put up against most of my favorite authors and can think, “Yeah, that belongs on the same shelf.”

It’s gratifying to think that and it took a while, but I’m at a sort of peace with what I’ve done for myself, even if I haven’t cracked a wide readership. Knowing I connected at all with even a small audience is amazing and beyond my expectations when I began.

OBAAT: You are a master of the short series, two or three books. Have you ever been tempted to go back and revisit an old series, say, for instance, Lars and Shaine, or the McGraws from the Rumrunners books?

EB: Three seems right to me. I don’t know that I could write a ten- or twenty-book series. Hats off to those who do. It’s a challenge.

When Wolfpack picked up the Rumrunners books there were only two. A trilogy seems better, especially in a book bundle the way they are packaged now, so I wrote a third book many years after the last stab at that series. It’s called Sideswipe and it’s only in that ebook bundle and because of that it may be my least read novel, but I still like it.

Going back after so long was easier than I expected.

I co-wrote a trilogy with Frank Zafiro, The ‘List’ Series (The Backlist, The Short List, The Getaway List) and he floated the idea that we revisit that one. I hesitated, then he suggested two novellas we could pair into one volume and that sparked an idea (because the end of Book Three felt fairly final). So I did write that and Frank is going to write his half when he has time in his very busy writing schedule. That’ll technically be four books in that series, which will make it the longest I’ve done.

Lars and Shaine for sure is done. I can’t see another story with them. The McGraws as well. After Carter I may be done with series entirely, even trilogies. But I know myself enough to know that if an idea comes or if someone wants more books with characters I created in any of the unsold books I’ve written, then I doubt I’d say no. If someone challenged me (and gave me contracts) for a ten-book series, I’d take the challenge and try to push myself because that’s just what I do, ill-advised or not.

Saturday, March 1, 2025

Joseph Wambaugh 1937 - 2025

Joe Wambaugh died yesterday at his home in California of esophageal cancer. He was 88.

 

I discovered his writing when I was in high school, a paperback copy of The New Centurions. Afte that the Blue Knight and the Police Story TV shows he created and co-produced. More than anyone, it was he who put the bug in my ear about cops.

 

I didn’t read him for a long time after. I went to college, got deeply involved in music, and read virtually all non-fiction for many years after. I came back to him with The Choirboys about ten years ago, then The Onion Field. Read all the ‘Hollywood Station” books. Right now I’m about halfway through reading, or re-reading, all his books in order.

 

No one had a greater influence on me as a writer of police procedurals; only three are roughly equivalent. (Alphabetically, Connie Fletcher, Ed McBain, David Simon.) His willingness to deviate from the main story line to show some of what cops have to face, either from the bosses or weird calls from citizens, allowed me to greatly loosen up how I told the Penns River stories, and for the better. His use of dark, sometimes even inappropriate humor also served as permission for me to more fully express myself.

 

No one I know who interacted with him ever had anything other than good things to say about him as a person. My personal story is, after coming across his web site in 2016, I dropped a line in the Contact page to tell him how much his books had meant to me. He wrote back to get my address, and a few days later two elegant bookmarks arrived in the mail. Silver on blue, they had an image of his LAPD badge and a listing of his books in order. He signed both on the back. On one he wrote,

“To Dana King,

That was a lovely message. Made my day

Warmest regards,

Joe Wambaugh”

Those are still my go-to bookmarks for whatever I’m currently reading. They never leave the house, lest I lose them.

 

  

Thursday, February 27, 2025

Writer's Block

 I will be brief:

There is no such thing as writer’s block.

THE END

 

 

AFTERWORD

Writer’s block can safely be attributed to a writer’s desire to either

A>  Procrastinate.

B>  Make writing appear to be a more exalted job than it is.

I’ll not waste time on procrastination. We can always find things to do to put off writing. Dishes, dusting, going down an internet wormhole, watching old movies. Why, just the other day I –

I’ll not waste any more  time on procrastination.

A more exalted job? “It’s not a job, you cretin. It’s a calling. It’s a career. It’s the air I breathe.”

Calm down. Those may be the reasons you do it. Doing it is a job. You sit your ass down and write. Period.

Acknowledging that it’s a job removes the cache from saying “I’m blocked,” which too often makes the writer present him- or herself as a tragic hero/heroine. Get over yourself. You’re not William The Wallace or Joan of Arc. You’re a writer.

To borrow an analogy from Reed Farrel Coleman, do teachers get Teacher’s Block? “Take a study hall today, kids. I’m blocked.” Ask a journalist if they get Journalist’s Block. “Sorry, Editor, I can’t give you those twelve inches you need on the president’s speech. I just don’t know where to start.”

I’ve written a Nick Forte private eye novel and a Western since I last spent time on my Penns River series. I’m well into two Fortes and have a heist novel about half plotted; the next Penns River novels isn’t coming to me. Am I blocked?

If I was, I’m not anymore.

The problem I had (past tense) moving forward with Penns River was that I was looking at too large a scope. I wanted to include police corruption, the growing power of the biker gang, and an old acquaintance of Doc’s coming back to town to become his nemesis. I was hung up trying to find stories I could hang from those.

That’s not how I work. My process is to find a lodgepole story and then find the other stuff to hang from it. I’d been looking at it ass backward.

Problem solved. I still have the work to do, but that’s only a matter of putting ass in seat and doing my job.

What people call writer’s block is no more than looking at too big a problem to be solved. Break it down. Eat the elephant one bite at a time, dumbass.

 

Thursday, February 20, 2025

An Interview with Sam Wiebe, Author of Ocean Drive

 Sam Wiebe is onw of my favorite interviews on the blog. We first met when we shared a table at the Shamus Award banquet in Raleigh in 2015. Since then we’ve stayed in touch personally, and Sam has become one of the handful of writers whose books I will buy just because they came out.

His newest entry is Ocean Drive.

One Bite at a Time: Welcome back to the blog, Sam. I always look forward to seeing you here.

Your newest book, Ocean Drive, is a departure for you in a couple of ways we’ll get into as we go. First, and most obvious, it’s not a private eye book. What sent you in this new direction?

Sam Wiebe: I wanted to write about the Washington-B.C. border, where you have sleepy towns like White Rock that also happen to be the site of transnational criminal enterprises. The novel investigates that from the point of view of a cop, Megan Quick, on the outside looking in, and a recently paroled killer, Cameron Shaw, who’s inside and trying to get out.

OBAAT: I got to the end of Ocean Drive and thought, “Oooo. A series,” as you’re as good as anyone I know at keeping a series fresh. Two questions here: Was I right about Ocean Drive being the pilot for a series? How do keep a series fresh while still touching all the bases people love about it?

SW: I love a good series. With Wakeland, there’s infinite inspiration because the Pacific Northwest is constantly changing. I don’t know if Ocean Drive will continue in that way, but I think it would make a swell TV show…(Editor’s Note: Oh, yeah.)

OBAAT: Your PI books are in the traditional PI first person; Ocean Drive alternates POV by chapter. Is one or the other easier or harder for you? What do you see as the advantages or disadvantages for the kinds of stories you write?

SW: First person has a tighter focus but a fuller expression of voice, whereas with third person you can put voices in conversation with each other. Megan’s chapter can end on a cliffhanger, and then Cam’s can pick up at the same point or earlier.

OBAAT: You’ve said that Ross MacDonald’s Lew Archer books are more about revelation than resolution. I see some of that in Ocean Drive. Who else influenced you in writing this book?

SW: An agent compared Cam’s voice in Ocean Drive to the Springsteen song “Straight Time.” That was nice to hear. I really like the way Richard Stark/Donald Westlake shifts point of view in the Parker novels. And Attica Locke’s Bluebird Bluebird is really great in terms of a law enforcement character who’s out of step with the others in their profession.

OBAAT: A personal, for me, question: Have we seen the last of Dave Wakeland? I hope not, but I also understand how authors’ interests evolve.

SW: Nope! The Last Exile is out this spring.

The PI genre is my favorite by far. It’s the closest to literature and the closest to real life—at least when it’s done well. 

OBAAT: The Beloved Spouse™ and I are returning to Bouchercon in New Orleans this September. Do you have your schedule set up for the year? Where can folks find you, either in person or online?

SW:. At samwiebe.substack.com I write a newsletter a few times a month, mostly reviewing old crime films and novels. samwiebe.com is my website. I also write under the pen name Nolan Chase, and the second Ethan Brand novel, A Lonesome Place for Murder, comes out this summer.

Thanks, Dana! Best to you and Corky.

Thursday, February 13, 2025

Legitimate Uses of AI for Writers

 It’s safe to say I’ve been harsh in my denunciations of writers who use artificial intelligence in their work. Nothing I’ll say here contradicts that. Artificial intelligence (AI) is, and will continue to be, useful in too many aspects of life to mention; I welcome many of them. It’s in the creative arena where I have my primary issues with its use.

Let’s get the vitriol out of the way: I have no time for ‘writers’ who use AI to ‘create’ anything, or even to generate ideas. If you feel the need for AI to write ad copy or marketing materials or a news or journal article, you be you. Just don’t call yourself a writer, as you’re a notch below plagiarist on the food chain. At least the copycat looked up what to steal.

That said, AI can be of legitimate value to writers. I’ll use myself as an example.

I used to print my final drafts a chapter at a time and read them aloud, marking the printed page as I found things that needed improvement. This became a difficult process when I developed macular degeneration, as I had to devote too much concentration to reading accurately to have any left over for listening to how it fell on the ear.

Enter Microsoft Word’s Read Aloud feature, which allows me to listen to a disembodied voice read what I see on the screen, which I magnify and reverse the image to accommodate my eyesight. I then go back and make the necessary changes right there on the screen.

How do I remember what needs to be changed? I never do more than a chapter at a time, and I always have Word display the document’s line numbers. I then make note of which lines need an adjustment and go directly there to make them.

A piece of advice: When making corrections in this manner, work backward. That way the line numbers you’re looking for won’t have changed as you make edits to the document.

When that draft is complete, I use the Check Document tool to look for spelling, grammar, and a few other potential errors. Many – maybe even most – of the suggestions will be ignored in a work of fiction. Names, places, and bits of dialog may not be in Word’s dictionary until I add them. (‘Jagov’ comes to mind in the Penns River stories, as well as names such as Napierkowski, Neuschwander, and Wierzbicki.) I may want some grammar to remain incorrect, especially in dialog. (As Chandler once famously wrote, “When I split an infinitive, God damn it, I split it so it will remain split.”) The clarity check typically calls out passive voice, which my years of writing documents for the government make me particularly prone to.

That’s what I use AI for: proofreading. It makes up for my deficiencies in vision and lack of training in proper grammar. Creating and driving the story forward are my job and always will be. AI’s only function is to clean up the horse shit after my parade has passed.